Never Regret The Things You Do In Life
Do you ever have a moment when your doing something but you really wanna be curled up in your orange cat pyjamas… this was my moment. I was standing on the top of the high dive at the pool, everybody was looking at me. Silence filled the room as thoughts swam through my head. “Should I jump or should I back down?” I take a deep breath and jump, I hit the water like thunder hits a crisp summer's eve. That's the day I learned that you should never let fear run your life because in the end it's not the things you do,you regret it's the things you don’t.
I really like your quote at the end. I think you got that from the movie that we watched last week. You have a mistake and I think it is after "that's the day"...
ReplyDeleteI think you don't need to use as much i's in your story. Great story! it pulled me in right away.
the mistake is you don't have a capital I
ReplyDeleteMaybe you could change the 'but really you wanna' to 'but you really wanna'. I think you should add more on what the place looks like. On the last sentence you forgot to capitalize the I and maybe you could put a comma after the 'because in the end'. Good job in your story this week !
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