Stairway to Heaven
“Is this it?’’ I questioned “Just a stairway to a bright light, how boring.”
“Well I’m sorry what were you expecting? Did you want a rope to climb, a backwards slide. You know for a dead person you sure are ungrateful”
My guardian angel said sarcastically.
“Okay I’ll stop, but seriously how do we get up there because I don’t feel like doing cardio today.” I joked.
“Please just wait” My guardian angel asked impatiently.
As things quieted a hand reached out and pulled me up the stairs. Once I came to the beautiful golden gates that's when I woke up.
You are missing a comma after expecting, because you are questioning/pausing. Other than that I really like your story, it was cool how you had a plot twist at the end. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteI really like your story. I liked how you did that plot twist at the end. I think that you could put in more info of where you are? like are you dead?
ReplyDeleteYou need to be more careful with your punctuations. You always need to put a comma after someone said something. I'm just confused when you said, "did you want a rope to climb, a backwards slide?" but good job on your story !
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